I
was in WW2 and the Germans were dropping bombs over London. It was
frightening and all of the English Army were trying to get people to
safety. I'm sorry for not Introducing myself, my name is Norman and I have great hope for our future. It is a new start for us all now, the English and the Germans.
This post was written collaboratively by a Year 7 intervention group at IPACA.
I wanted to read the next bit. Excellent style and starting. I want to know more about Norman now! Well done!
ReplyDeleteGreat introduction, setting the scene is often very important and you have done that really well... Just a historical point (Sorry to be piccy) The emergency services and the national gaurd did the job of getting people to safety... the Army were fighting :)... The best thing is I wanted to read more :) MD
ReplyDeleteA brilliant introduction to your story everyone. I am really impressed you have worked so well together to write this piece of work. You have created a great cliffhanger that makes the reader want to read on, which is a very important skill.
ReplyDeleteWell done for participating in the 100WC, I really look forward to reading your future entries.
Miss Wallis - Team 100WC
I loved the way you started to tell the story then paused for a moment to tell us your name, letting the reader know that the story was more important than the writer. There was a story to be told and you intended to tell it.
ReplyDeleteThank-you for all your comments.
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